Thursday 5 December, Today is a very important day in the Thai history, the king's birthday. I woke up early in the morning I went to the Temple for made merit with my mother but my father can't came here with me because he wasn't fine after made merit. I went home and bring some food together. I had breakfast with my family.
We was very happiness after that I called with my father. I wished him have a healthy, long life, happy on father day and happy in him life forever. He was cry and he called me for this wish gave me to feedback.
Around 5 p.m. I went to Watphokaram School to joined the celebration of his the king's birthday. There are a lot of people here. Everyone lit their candles and sang a song for him. The they said, "Long live the King". The fireworks were very beautiful. I am not surprised how we love our king because everyone know about this thing and this is a very special day that I will never forget it. It is the best father's day for me.
Good morning,Molly
ตอบลบYour blog sound beautiful. But, there are some mistakes with it. Like as the begining you should put the word "on" on the sentence "Thursday 5,December".Next,you should change sentence became "Today is a very important day in Thailand" or "Today is a very important day of the Thai history".
Your story interesting You write a story about a king and your father. I read that the tears will flow. You would hope the parents like me. You wrote a good story but there are some instances where I thought it was strange but I advise you not because I was not smart. And the word "Temple" does not use a big T because is not non-specific name. Ask you to fix it. Thanks.
ตอบลบThank you my friend for opinion, I will improve it.
ตอบลบYour blog is a wonderful blog because of our's the king. Your picture can appeal me to read it.
ตอบลบBut you have some mistakes words. I believe that you can do it better than with a next blog.
Hi Molly how are you????
ตอบลบThe paragraph is interesting for me and I would like to tell you about line nine at "father day " you have to write "father's day", And line twelve at this sentence "I went to Watphokaram School to joined the celebration " the word "joined" don't use past sentence.
Dear Pa Moll,
ตอบลบWe are so closed now and can give some comments together. So, I would like to share some ideas with you. I think you should rewrite it becuase I think it is quite as same as yours in the textbooks sumitted to me. So, choose anather day and another things might help you not copy your own tasks.
Anyway, keep on writing and I will follow yours later